The Unanticipated
The surprise
The undiscovered…
Rare finds uncovered
Ribbons, wrappers, bags…
Enthusiastic squeals
Energetic giggles
Eyes bright
Awe inspired faces
Amazement, gratitude, delight
Today anticipation
Tonight realization
Tomorrow reliving…
My first attempt at 6 Word Fridays
17 comments:
you really captured the feeling of a surprise, nice!
Reliving's half the fun of experiencing! :)
This is really great. Love your six word post!
I like the third and last stanza the best! Very evocative. Great poem!
I also wanted to say I love this poem format. I don't know if that is the correct word, but I love working within confines...and the one you chose is GREAT! Does it have a name?
Evocative, open-ended and mysterious close... and the format is very effective. Lovely!
Thanks everyone. I had a free minute yesterday and noted how much fun Belinda seems to have doing these so... I enjoyed it greatly.
If the form has a name I don't know... I just thought it would be fun to use the letters of "Treat" and play with the form of an acrostic in that each letter is doubled to allow for the 6 word idea. It was fun.
I loved what you did with this, TE! And definitely, reliving the treat is almost better than the treat itself.
beautiful! now i want a surprise to open, enjoy and relive! :)
A beautiful surprise. An enjoyable poem. Thank you for sharing.
unique yet eloquent...
keep it up.
love your poetry.
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That was cool :)
I liked your words.. thanks.
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I love the alliteration and assonance, plus it flowed easily.
Sweet...receiving a surprise gift is quite an event indeed...you paint that experience quite nicely here.
You managed to capture numerous emotions in your 6-word poem. What came to me most was pure unadulterated childish glee... well written.
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