He stands
Uncomfortable
Guarded
Holding himself tightly
Uncertain, defensive
Gauging my actions.
Hungry for affection
Unwilling to accept
Grateful, yet regretful of my inaction.
Hug him I could
Umbrella him for a moment
Grace I could give.
Hold him as a friend
Unwelcome though my touch
Give compassion.
9 comments:
Wonderful One Shot! Your poetic style captures the ambivalence surrounding desire for true connection...well written and very poignant!
Sometimes that resistance just makes you want to hug them even more. Nice One Shot!
i am sure he would appreciate the hug...smiles.
As a friend, yes, but I think there's more suggested here. Well done.
The dilemma is palpable... I enjoyed your place with words.. when ever I hear the word "As a friend" I know its not love but likeness, why love has to be limited by giving it names...?
thanks for sharing..
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I could feel the hug throughout your words and would encourage everyone to never hold back a hug.
a wonderful sentiment and loved what both annie & eric had to say..thanks for sharing with osw..cheers pete
Thank you everyone for your thoughts! It is nice to have this forum and the feedback. Thank you...
Effective, spare language/structure.
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